Chemical Reactions:
Your thesis statement was really strong and said a whole lot about what the body was going to be about. Also, I liked how you dicussed quotes from the article in your introduction paragraph, because it reminded me of what the article was about. I think if you researched more on this topic you could have a really interesting final essay! I would be interested in reading more on what you find and your opinion on the subject because you did make some valid points in your blog! Good job!
Robot Consciousness:
Again, you has a really strong thesis statment. I enjoyed your examples of movies that have had the concept of robots have a conscious and I thought it was smart adding that it your blog because in a way in helped the reader visualize what your talking about. I think if you expand your thoughts and get ideas from researchers other than Minksy this could be a really good final essay as well. I would like to read a little more of your opinion on the subject!
Good Without God:
I think this is one of your best blogs. You had some really strong points in it and it was really well written. You had a good introduction paragraph, however I would just read it through because some sentences might be better put in the condluding paragraph rather than introduction. I like the fact that you put the two different views on the topic! I would like to see more of both views in a final essay.
Overall I think your strong points are you ability to construct a well organized essay with a strong thesis statement. I enjoyed reading all of you writing and I appreciate the advice on my work! I hope my advice helped with your final essay! Good luck with the rest of the semester! :)
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