You always do a good job of combining facts from the articles we read, and your own opinion, which gets the reader thinking. I found that you had no grammatical errors and your citations seemed to all be correct. One strong point you have is your introduction paragraphs! They all have a strong thesis sentence and lead directly into your body but still contain what your going to be discussing! Another strong point was how all of your titles are very creative and grabbed my attention from the start! Good job on all of you work!
The Hungry Economy:
I think you did an excellent job of stating interesting and relative facts for the this blog! Sometimes research writings can tend to be a blick clunky because of so much information, but you did a really good job in organization and writing smoothly. I think with so much information out there about the topic, this blog could be a good one to think about expanding on for your final essay. Again, you had a very good introduction paragraph as well as conclusion, and it was clear what your thesis was. I found no grammatical errors and all of your citations were correct. I found your dicussion on Asian immigrants contributing to our economy to be very interesting and I would be interested to read an expanded essay on this topic!
A Material World:
I really enjoyed this blog post! Again, you did a really job of choosing good quotes from Twitchells article to support your opinions and your thesis. Sentences like, Without such gifts, what would those holidays be like? I almost want to believe that they wouldn’t exist. Or maybe they would, but they just wouldn’t be that fun..", I found to be really interesting and very true! This is another example of how you get the readers attention and get them thinking! You had an excellent concluding paragraph and I think you would have no problem developing this blog into a well written, strong, essay! Good Job!
Screwdriver, hardrive.....brain?
I think the topic along was a very interesting topic, but your outlook on the assignment made it even more interesting. I think this is another blog that you could expand your argument that humans have superiority over machines. With the many different arguments that have been made by scientists and philosophers, along with the many examples you provided, your information was well researched and back up your opinion nicely! Only suggestion would be to make a stronger conclusion for the essay if you choose this topic. Overall I really enjoyed all of you work and I think your a very good writer! Thanks for the advice on my work, and I hope mine helped a little. Good luck!
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